Not much...just bleeding out my heart...is this acceptable?

Whores need love too


________________________!


________________________...


________________________?





these blank stanzas


just about says it all..


a thousand painful thoughts


unwritten..


from a heart that's been broken


by people who sees me


as something to be used


and abused


as far as i can tell


everyone saw me


as someone


who is both beautiful


unfortunate and credulous


to them i am..very utilizable.





no man is an island


i wish i was..


than to have been thrown


to cold blooded sharks


over and over again


eating away at my skin,


tearing me apart


to bloody bits and pieces


til there's none...





no one has ever


really loved me


nobody ever dared


to love me.


i haven't seen it's face


what am i then?


am i not human?


it hasn't touched my hide


am i so unworthy of love?





*sighs


So I take comfort with the pain,


That will ease again someday,


and still mean the same.

Not much...just bleeding out my heart...is this acceptable?
wow - see the weird thing is , it's very similar to a poem I wrote about 10 years ago. I have a question though - to me a whore is not someone who is giving her heart - just her body - so is this person - you? whoever - a whore or are they looking for love.


Sounds to me that this person is looking for love, not just sex. Are you calling yourself a whore or did someone call you a whore?


by people who sees me - take the s off of sees.


is this acceptable? that's a lot of pain, keep writing it's a great way to express pain. Is the poem acceptable? other than the ? about your use of the word whore, it's a very expressive poem, but I'm also going to tell you that if you were to turn this for a class assignment, some of your lines would be considered trite and it would be great if you could find another way to express the same feeling. which lines?


no man is an island


cold blooded sharks....eating away at my skin, to bloody bits and pieces - I only say this, because I was told the same thing by a college professor. while writing poetry can certainly be about expressing our pain, if you want it to be good you don't want to use trite expressions.


keep writing, overall it's very good, and it's helps to write. I hope your pain eases soon.
Reply:i love you,


i will love you,


at least in my mind,


i do, so true,


i might not know,


whaat you have been going through,


but all i know is you,


and that you have a beauty-full soul,


let no minds tear you down,


let no one tell you who you are,


that you are not,


let the winds,


dance with you,


where ever you go,


because indeed they are your true friends,
Reply:Whores are usually the nicest people you will ever talk to or be around, they have been through it all, seen it all, have -- like you said, been very utilized. Still, through the pain they either pick up the pieces and turn their life around or let the sharks devour them. I like your poem, you write good poetry, although I still don't know your age range, but for a young girl, nevertheless, the poetry is deep and depicting of what you have been through. Thanks for sharing! : )
Reply:wow u sure have been writing some sad poetry. .you must have been deeply torn into from someone . or something :( sounds to me ur being eat up little by little ..
Reply:Ah, man, I'm sorry for whatever they did to you... -hugs- You'll find someone good to love soon, don't worry. Well, it may take time, but there someone out there who's perfect for you! =)
Reply:That poem is really sad .you sound as if your hurt.Dont' think no one loves you .Theres some one who will love you till' death . And he is with you at all times.You just gotta believe hes' with you.
Reply:to answer the question in bold.


love is never with standing ,


not for one, not for all.


the memories do so count


so much they fade,,


only into thoughts remembered


that words can not say.





take care,


D.
Reply:Just read your poem could feel pain i remember being rejected not to long ago i didn't like the advice i got at the time its like hitting your finger with a hammer then having people say acceptance is the answer sure but at the time it doesn't help i did feel a big release a few days later i think being with friends helped.
Reply:it's acceptable for now, but your heart will eventually heal


and the pain will slowly fade away.
Reply:"No, it's very unacceptable."


You sound very depressed, don't give yourself a bloody heart.


You will find love, only if you be yourself, be kind to others, and just live your life, ( just try not to be a whore.)
Reply:Very depressing but chin up you may make a few bob tonight

gordon